tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post2825164065172655563..comments2010-10-29T14:43:42.143-05:00Comments on Falling In: Fiction Friday: “I knew it was a mistake the moment it was over.”Laura Rachel Foxhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05407312422139066511noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post-72383891798073235132010-05-17T05:55:57.216-05:002010-05-17T05:55:57.216-05:00Thanks so much for the feedback. I'm finding ...Thanks so much for the feedback. I'm finding [fiction friday] to be an invaluable resource not only for freewriting ideas, but also an opportunity to hear the thoughts and feelings of other writers. <br /><br />I really fell into this page and can't wait to "finish" this story.Laura Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407312422139066511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post-71518978558108010922010-05-16T11:39:11.224-05:002010-05-16T11:39:11.224-05:00Very nice! You've done well with dialogue, so...Very nice! You've done well with dialogue, something that I struggle with. I think I'll reread a few times to get the rhythm of it. I like it.<br /><br />What I like about the ending is you don't really know if it is a mistake or not. Is there something real she is worried about, or is it just panic at moving the relationship further? Definitely a good hook.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post-53854020593860828692010-05-16T08:25:28.362-05:002010-05-16T08:25:28.362-05:00John - thanks for reading & giving some feedba...John - thanks for reading & giving some feedback. Please see my earlier apology comment. I think I will have to continue this story in a later post.Laura Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407312422139066511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post-40031749523830238712010-05-16T08:02:04.948-05:002010-05-16T08:02:04.948-05:00Why was it a mistake? Leave me wondering! Geez!
Go...Why was it a mistake? Leave me wondering! Geez!<br />Good work.<br /><br />http://johnpender.net/2010/05/fiction-friday-155/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post-8850858922114765352010-05-15T23:25:00.706-05:002010-05-15T23:25:00.706-05:00I like the mystery that the ending leaves. It cer...I like the mystery that the ending leaves. It certainly feels like it belongs in a longer piece, but the fact that things remain unanswered is wonderful.<br />A good read where the uncertainty in the character is evident.<br />AdamAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post-91444585193052465032010-05-15T17:53:48.426-05:002010-05-15T17:53:48.426-05:00Loved it! I'll be checking out your other pil...Loved it! I'll be checking out your other pillowbook entries.Lisa Foxnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post-9296664660887977982010-05-15T16:24:37.460-05:002010-05-15T16:24:37.460-05:00I suppose I owe my readers an apology for the earl...I suppose I owe my readers an apology for the early break. Freewriting often leaves gaps for us to later fill. <br /><br />Thanks for the feedback. I'm not sure what Tabitha will say next or what she will do with this dilemma. Maybe I will write a continuation. I'm also curious to find out what happens next.Laura Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407312422139066511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post-44821893936725156072010-05-15T10:17:52.295-05:002010-05-15T10:17:52.295-05:00wow, this is AmAzInG. it seemed like there was a t...wow, this is AmAzInG. it seemed like there was a tension, and that the story was heading to a resolve. but, the way you ended it left me wanting more and with the feeling that the REAL tension had only just begun. what a twist, & what an impact on the reader! although, i DO feel you toyed with me a bit lol. <br /><br />great job, can't wait to read more.mike foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04820630954659336880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post-82904301571292658952010-05-15T08:01:16.804-05:002010-05-15T08:01:16.804-05:00When the story came to a close, you left me wantin...When the story came to a close, you left me wanting more. I can't help but wonder why it was a mistake. I would have loved to hear a continuation of dialog during the therapy session.<br /><br />Thanks for sharingWalthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09181882400222796147noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3318540014252612982.post-89460476248573345852010-05-15T05:55:42.672-05:002010-05-15T05:55:42.672-05:00Yes, I know it's technically Saturday, but I j...Yes, I know it's technically Saturday, but I just couldn't resist the topic. I kept skipping over the [fiction friday] email in my inbox yesterday, not wanting to spoil my efforts with too much thought. So now that I have a free moment, here it is. I had a great time composing. <br /><br />This is not my usual style/feel for a story. Maybe I've been reading too much Cosmo while on leave from work?!?Laura Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407312422139066511noreply@blogger.com